This term we have been looking at ways to make our writing more interesting for the reader.
We have used the following criteria to guide us:
- Changing the word order of a sentence
- Using literary devices such as metaphor, simile, alliteration, onomatopoeia and personification
- Using specific verbs and adjectives
- Using show, don’t tell techniques
- Using different sentence beginnings and lengths
Here are some examples of my writing this term.
Show Don’t Tell - Emotions
Sad: Skip and Hop. As I was walking along the beach with a big smile on my face, eating my chocolate ice-cream. Skip and Ahhhhh!!!!I fall, my chocolate ice-cream was covered with sand, and my face was covered with sadness.
Excited:My stomach was filled with excitement. I put my ABS stickers on, also I put my ABS flag in my bag. Finally I put my engaged and excited self in the car, BRUMM the engine starts going, Just like that we escaped with excitement.
Angry: As soon as I heard the news that my dog haddied my heart was split open, tears were dripping down my frowned face.
Writing to Music
Flip, turn as the ninjas try and get to the top of the mountain, where the king was. Tip toe as they run up the the rocks. Jump and flip as they get to the top of the mountain. Tip toe tip toe as they walk quietly to the king. It started getting more intense, grades were everywhere. But the ninjas were there to do a job. Ughh!! One of the ninjas CAME OUT of nowhere with a knife in there hand.
To Be Continued……
The Boy
I thumped the gate open. As I took one sad slowly step a tears drops down. Ugh!! Why does death have to exist, life will be more happier funnier and more less crying. Bustar was my dog, well more than that, we were best friends, Every day we will go for walks and play fun games. But then it came to this sad, herat broken day, HE’S GONE!!!. What am I going to do now. My life is going to be miserable.
Viking Girl
“NO!! MUM I DON’T WANNA WEAR THIS” Honey this is the only thing I could find” replied mum. Amy got so angry she had big black bags under her eyes, she was grabbing and pulling her hair as she was yelling and screaming at her mum. Then she finally had enough and STOMPED all the way to her room and SLAMMED the door with a big bright red face.
Drenna
